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JCSTME



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Join date : 2016-07-15

PostSubject: My Application   Fri Jul 15, 2016 11:16 pm

Steam Name: JCST09
Steam ID: STEAM_0:1:43705555
Steam Profile Link: http://steamcommunity.com/id/nicecheese0999
Age: 23
Rp Experience: I have about 2 years of RP experience under my belt, more if you consider DarkRP experience XD
How did you stumble upon our server?: Found it while browsing gmod
Tell me a cool Mass Effect Fact: I was playing Mass Effect 1 and found a soviet satellite on the moon. Not the coolest but I thought it was cool.

Character Name: Juliana Veracruz
Character Race: Human
Why did you choose this race?: Last I checked I was a human, since this is my first Mass Effect RP, I figured I'd start out as a simple human.
Age: 23
What can your character do for our ship? (Muscle, Maintenance, Triggerman, Comedic Act, etc.): Muscle
Character Equipment: Phoenix Armor, M-8 Avenger
Moral Alignment: Lawful Evil
Strengths: Will do whatever it takes to complete the mission, Charismatic
Weaknesses: Uneasy around Krogans and Turians
Character Backstory a.ka. how or why are you here (One paragraph minimum, be creative!):
Juliana Veracruz was born in San Antonio, Texas, UNAS in 2160. Growing up was tough for Juliana, her family was not exactly the richest around. When her father was alive, she didn't have to worry about food not being on the table. When she was 13, her father passed away after a warehouse accident. With her family's main source of income gone, food became scarce. Her mother picked up a second job but that was still not enough. Juliana had to turn to more illegal means to make money to keep her family fed. Working the streets, Juliana got tough. She didn't take no bull from no one. She continued to walk the streets until she was 18. On her 18th birthday, her mother found out how Juliana had been acquiring money and disowned her. Without a home and family, she began to drift around. She continues to drift around, perhaps looking for something permanent.....
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Join date : 2016-05-11
Age : 24

PostSubject: Re: My Application   Mon Jul 18, 2016 10:47 am

JCSTME wrote:
What can your character do for our ship? (Muscle, Maintenance, Triggerman, Comedic Act, etc.): Muscle

Muscle, cool.  Is there anything else he might do?  I ask because we have a lot of characters who are simple 'muscle' and it's probably a good idea to get a second skill on the Geisha.

JCSTME wrote:
Moral Alignment: Lawful Evil

Whoo, more evil people!  Very Happy

JCSTME wrote:
Strengths: Will do whatever it takes to complete the mission, Charismatic
Weaknesses: Uneasy around Krogans and Turians

Can you revise this section a bit?  Honestly, I like to see it where there's at least three major strengths and three major weaknesses, a combination of physical and mental.  Especially since your character's primary job seems to be muscle, give him more than just an uneasiness around other species.

JCSTME wrote:
Juliana Veracruz was born in San Antonio, Texas, UNAS in 2160. Growing up was tough for Juliana, her family was not exactly the richest around. When her father was alive, she didn't have to worry about food not being on the table. When she was 13, her father passed away after a warehouse accident. With her family's main source of income gone, food became scarce. Her mother picked up a second job but that was still not enough. Juliana had to turn to more illegal means to make money to keep her family fed. Working the streets, Juliana got tough. She didn't take no bull from no one. She continued to walk the streets until she was 18. On her 18th birthday, her mother found out how Juliana had been acquiring money and disowned her. Without a home and family, she began to drift around. She continues to drift around, perhaps looking for something permanent.....

This backstory is, honestly, perfect.  Short and to the point.  Completely plausible.  It makes my job easier, at least.  XD

Your app is, for now, pending.  Work on the strengths and weaknesses in particular, and if you can try and add another talent/job for Juliana to do aboard the Geisha.
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